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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)
I’m still here …

The One you seek to be reborn
The One who gains your classmates’ scorn
The One you think you can replace
The One who offers saving grace
The One who understands your fear
The One who comforts every tear
The One whose praises you have sung
I guarded you when you were young

I’m still here …

The One you feel you need to blame
The One whose mercy stays the same
The One from whom you try to hide
The One you will not let inside
The One whose blessings you deny
The One you wish would let you die
The One you need to feel serene
I held you when you were a teen

I’m still here …

The One you think you can ignore
The One you shut outside the door
The One to whom you used to pray
The One from whom you’ve turned away
The One you think brings grief and pain
The One whose spirit will remain
The One whose grace you once were shown
I’ve stayed with you since you have grown

I’m still here …

The One you need to feel alive
The One your soul needs to survive
The One for whom your heart doth yearn
The One who longs for your return
The One who wants to set you free
The One whose love will always be

I’m still here …
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Dixie Phillips
05/25/07
A wonderful reminder of the ONE who is always there.
Maxx .
05/25/07
you almost look past the "I'm still here" lines ... the eyes just skip over them. But what a resounding promise and so well stated. This is very good.
Rhonda Clark
05/26/07
I could hear God saying this. Good work.
Jacquelyn Horne
05/26/07
Very moving. It should help us to remember the One we have set aside do often.
Cassie Memmer
05/29/07
Great poem. I like the style and it has a wonderful message. He never fails us! He's always there, definitely!
Jan Ackerson
05/29/07
This is just unbelievably moving--I'm touched and near tears. How absolutely perfect.
Henry Clemmons
05/29/07
I could hear your heart. Very nice.
Betty Castleberry
05/29/07
What a wonderful way to say He is still here, and waiting so patiently. Well done.
Dee Yoder
05/29/07
All of our shifting feelings for God and contrastly, His consistency, are reflected in your poem. I enjoyed reading it very much.
Teri Wilson
05/29/07
Tim, This is really lovely. I really like how the poem shifts and changes to parallel the aging of a person. Outstanding!
Verna Cole Mitchell 
05/29/07
Awesome poety with an awesome message! Really good job!
Benjamin Graber
05/29/07
I like how this poem puts so much focus on all Father has done for us, by the use of repetition. Great job!
Leigh MacKelvey
05/29/07
I think The One repeated over and over again gave a feeling of the reality that there IS only One! Only One who is all those things to us and is always still here. Nice job.
Joanne Sher 
05/29/07
Excellent use of repetition - extremely effective. This touched me in so many ways.
Rita Garcia
05/30/07
Moving, touching and so well written! Tissue please!
Donna Powers
05/30/07
Amen and thank God He is always here! Well done. Thanks for sharing
dub W
05/30/07
The repitition makes the poem hard hitting. I can almost see this as a protest or a demand. Good job.
Patty Wysong
05/30/07
Wonderful! You captured God's consistancy (and so much more!!) as well as our journey. Love this!
Loren T. Lowery
05/30/07
I especially liked the repition of the title through out the poem as it added to its overall message and the fact that no matter the time or circumstances He is always still there.
LaNaye Perkins
05/30/07
You did an awesome job of making an outstanding point. Great work!
Sara Harricharan
05/30/07
Second page or not...this certainly makes its message known! This is great. The repitition strengthens it very well and overall, I feel there's even more between the lines. Good job!