The Official Writing Challenge
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05/07/20
Your story was totally different from anything I've read so far. It must be so difficult to lose control of most of the muscle tone in your face.
Wow! Glad there was little suffering for your MC.
05/07/20
Loved the writing!!!
05/08/20
Very good descriptions and I felt relief that your MC found hope in the Lord. That would be a difficult situation to go through.
This piece touches my heart in a different way. My mom died from 3 cranial aneurysms rupturing. I wanted her to live no matter what and it took a lot ofgiving it to God over and over before I accepted she had done God's work her entire life and although she still died at a young age, God continues to use her even today. That's pretty cool when I think about it. It's too easy to care more about the outside than the inside, but God uses these tragedies in wonderful ways if we just give him a chance. Good job.
05/16/20
Bonnie, this is such excellent writing. You placed us inside her. I've worked in nursing homes and have known that the mind was active in there. Very good job.
07/23/20
Wow! This is unique. I would love to see it with internal dialog showing the turmoil. That would deliver a bigger punch!