The Official Writing Challenge
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Very profound message.
You did an awesome job of writing on this difficult topic. The essence of the topic was sprinkled throughout the entire piece. For me, the beginning was a tad too wordy, almost like you were trying too hard with the words you selected. The ending, however, was brilliant. It got right to the point and touched my heart. Normally, I might say you don't need to summarize the message for the reader, but you did it on point, and it really worked for me. I thought it powerful and is a story I shall remember.
Thought provoking!
Powerful message here! I got confused by the beginning, but I too think the ending was very strong.
Oh please simplify the first paragraph. This is a great story that I almost didn't read because I got tangled up in the opening. And it is a story that needs to be heard!
Congratulations on ranking 11th overall. Happy Dance!