The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/20
Wow! I am not into poetry, but this grabbed and held me. I will be reading this to others because it so powerfully tells the gospel without any Christianese. Love it!
Nice! I could feel a rap beat to it.
This has a wonderful message. You started right off with a great conflict that makes the reader really think and you carried it through right to the powerful resolution. I don't usually notice titles, but yours was a great fit. Poetry is my weakest genre by far, but I did find myself stumbling at times and some rhymes felt a bit forced to my tone-deaf ears. I noticed you used a lot of exclamation points, but not sure you needed them because I could definitely feel your excitement by your word choice. You packed so much information and hope in limited space. I believe this could be used by many to proclaim the amazing news about Jesus and how he loves us. You wrote on topic, delivered a powerful message and made it clear what a precious God we have. Good job.
02/28/20
Nicely done!
Blessings~
03/06/20
Congratulations on your EC! I'm fascinated by the mysteries of God, too. I like the lines "Become as a child for the Kingdom to gain;
Save treasures in heaven or gather in vain." One of my favorite "mysteries" is "work out your salvation, for it is God who works in you." God bless!