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Wow! Incredible story of unselfishness!
What a loving, giving woman. My jaw dropped at the end. Wow! Generous indeed. Thank you for sharing this beautiful story with us.
You have written the most beautiful picture of generosity I could even imagine. What a wonderful mother you had. I wish I could have known her.
Oh, you made me cry! Such a treasured soul.
Oh, wow. What a story.

You have a POV shift from Anna's mother to Anna herself after the 1st paragraph. Easily fixed, though, and it didn't detract from the story itself.

Great job telling your mom's story.
Congratulations on First Place. Well deserved!
Wow, what an incredible story. Loved it. Well done on first place!
I could tell this was written straight from the heart. And what a perfect last sentence. Well deserved first place win!
What a wonderful example of a loving Christian mother. I'm sure she blessed many people.

Congratulations on winning 1st place this week.

I would take out the first line of your story. It shifted the POV away from your mom to your grandmother.