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I loved the detail and uniqueness of the beginning. The setting really entrapped Simon, revealing the entrapped general atmoshere, and Simon's entrapped thoughts.

I did feel the latter part of the story was attached; it didn't really evolve out of character, setting, or plot.

I have heard the story of Simon's denial of Christ already. This portrayal did not reveal anything unique about Simon or the situation.

Do the confines of Gods greenery continue to entrap Simon afterward? What is his reaction? It almost seems John gives him an out by suggesting he disguise himself, as if it were the proper thing to do.
Interesting take on the topic and the biblical story. I like your graphic imagery, and I could see it all play out.
It took me until about the middle to realize who your MC is. I enjoyed it, thankful for the fresh glance into what that night might have been like for them. Great job.
I think this is a great take on the story. You did an awesome job of getting inside Peter's head. The pacing matched the urgency of the scene and you nailed the topic.
Great job with this piece, well done. I enjoyed it, thank you!
Oh... Whenever I read or hear this story, I feel so sorry for Peter. He meant well, but then eventually felt the awful shame of disappointing his Lord.
Congrats on your EC!