The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow-such a true-to-life story. I want to hear more! Well done.
06/09/19
Very good story...leaves quite an emotional impact.
This is a great story. It has a powerful hook that pulled me in right away. The only part that confused me was when the MC said she could tell her parents were proud of her. Their actions showed anything but pride. I get that she was doing the rituals and praying as instructed so I wondered if you meant if I do these things maybe then my parents will be proud. Overall though, the story is heartbreaking. The message is clear. The pacing spot on. I also thought you nailed the ending, which is often the hardest part. I liked the open-ending. Good job.
Congratulations on ranking 12 overall. Happy Dance!