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I just happen to read this on the 75th anniversary of D-Day. I have a lot of empathy for your man. It's to bad we do sometimes brush aside our heroes. Nicely done.
Well done! Sad but true of how we treat our elders.
06/07/19
Well written story! It's very true that we should learn from our elders. They have so much to teach us.
06/08/19
Since I am part of that gentleman's generation, I could identify with a lot of what he said (sans the greenery between his teeth). :-) I have observed and read about how much respect Orientals show their elders, whereas in our culture, "youth" is the focus and what everyone here emulates. Your writing is exceptional. I love some of your expressions and word choices. This is a prize-worthy entry.
06/08/19
Great point! I always try to be patient and listen when someone is talking to me - especially someone who is my elder. More people need to learn to listen.

Noticed a couple tiny, tiny things like a sudden switch to present tense in the third paragraph, but I'm being nitpicky.

Nicely done. Thanks for sharing!
This is delightful. I connected with the characters right away. The pacing was spot on and the ending was divine.
I enjoyed this very well-told story, and it leads me to think you have a caring heart and good rapport with people.
Congratulations on ranking 18 overall! Happy Dance!