The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/19
Interesting approach to the topic, with a message that you could never 'tire' of hearing.
Well done.
04/14/19
Unique approach in delivery and content, well done!

Blessings~
This was such a cute take on the topic- I loved it! well done.
04/15/19
I love this! What a creative take on the topic. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Well done!
I love stories like this. I often muse about the thoughts of animals and inanimate objects. Not everyone likes those type of "unrealistic" stories, but I think this is brilliant. The out-of-the-box take on the topic is fresh and exhilarating. I did notice you used quite a few exclamation points. I'd limit them except maybe in dialog because your word choice and character development does the exclaiming for you. I'm terrible about reading titles, so I wasn't sure who the MC was right off. For me, I prefer not knowing and might suggest a different title (although what I'm not sure because titles aren't easy for me). The analogy here is so powerful. The ending is a perfect resolution that left me grinning. I really hope you tweak this a bit and find a home for it in a magazine or a collection of short stories. It's one of my favorites.
Congratulations on ranking 18th overall. Happy Dance. (This is still one of my favorites this week!)