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03/07/19
What a glimpse of what it is like to have a husband in the military. I could feel her frustration. And her love for him. Good job.
I liked the way you made this pre and post arrival! Sometimes we don't know how good we have it until we no longer do. For me, I would have liked to have seen some white space between dialogue. It seemed clumped together in the middle section, and kind of muddied the read for me. Does that make sense? I liked the title- so fitting!
03/07/19
You held my attention through this story, I appreciated the honesty of the main character, and I liked the sweet ending. Very nice.
This emphasizes what military families deal with and how they must cope, even when the deployed family member returns. You told the story well. Kudos!
03/08/19
My sister found this to be true when her husband returned on furlough from the Air Force once. You've captured the frustration of the wife and mother and it turned out well. Unfortunately, for some, the long periods of time apart proved to be too much strain on a marriage and divorce was common especially during the war years. A very interesting take on "absence makes the heart grow fonder."
The frustration of your MC came through loud and clear, as did her love for her husband. I hadn't thought about the adjustments when the absence is over! The story was well plotted. I did like how you "showed" what a gentle man he was, reading to his daughter.
03/08/19
Wow...great job in this powerful read. Thank you for sharing.

Blessings~
03/09/19
Wow! Great writing.

We can feel the frustration of the MC, yet there is humor in her comments.

I like the take on the topic: showing the reasons the reasons the heart isn't always as fond without the absence.

I especially liked the ending and her choosing to see him through eyes of love.
03/09/19
I like this. Great descriptions, and I loved the fish stick lines. TO the point that I might have even gone back to it at the end... Something like, "I love him, and nothing will ever change that, but next time I'll have him make the fish sticks." I don't know. That's cheesy. It's probably best how you have it. :)
03/14/19
Congrats!
Blessings~
03/14/19
Congratulations on your 7th place win!

I was going to write a story about a military husband's return, but I'm glad I wasn't able to finish mine because your story is so well done. I liked the humor incorporated throughout.