The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed your story. Well done and well written!
This is brilliant. It held me captive from the first word to the very end. I so enjoyed the subtle tongue-in-cheek humor. My red ink is tiny. When using Mom or Dad as a name start it with a capital letter. Your message is so profound, and seems to fit so many things going on in the world today. It's actually timeless, which is sad in many ways, but if it changes the heart or thoughts of just one person, what a beautiful blessing!
So sad how some people can be so obnoxiously rude. I loved the response made by the mother.
Loved this! The ladies had me angry, but the innocent answers of the children and the mother's reply were perfect. Overcome evil with the truth. Beautifully written.
What an awesome story! I loved the innocence of the kids. You used wonderfully descriptive words. Great job.
How funny that the women could not see the irony of their own words. They claim to be German and Scottish, and one of them has a thick accent - and yet tell the kids to go home!

As a citizen fo three different countries, I feel like the mom and the kids - and when my three countries all compete in one event in the Olympics I cannot pick who to cheer for!

Lovely, insightful story.
Congratulations on ranking 24 overall. Happy Dance!