The Official Writing Challenge
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Fun take on the many feet entries in the Bible!
This is a great story. You did a great job of pulling many feet stories from the Bible. For me, the dialog didn't feel authentic. It was a bit formal. Also for taglines, keep it simple with he said or she asked. If you want to replace them with body language instead, that would paint more of a picture. For example: After a brief prayer for God’s guidance, Jeff smiled and looked each person in the eyes. “So, what've ya'all learned about feet?"
Also remember to start Bible with a capital letter.
I think your message s on each part are strong and made me stop and think. You definitely nailed the topic. Although I've seen some of the feet verses in other stories this week, you did a nice job of making the story fresh and interesting. My favorite line was our feet keeping us in contact with the world. I thought that really spoke volumes. Nice job.
Thank you for a great "on topic" article. I liked how you used dialog in a classroom setting to demonstrate your points. Good information from the Bible too. Well done!
Congratulations on ranking 19 overall. Happy Dance!