The Official Writing Challenge
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Hmmm, I don’t know. Not too believable. I understand all things are possible with God, but I didn’t think the story was convincing.
I personally know some commercial fishermen and so this story IS believeable to me. And God DOES like to do "suddenly" kinds of things. (ie...And suddenly, the sky was filled with angels singing Glory to God in the Highest!) He is God of the impossible. The only part that caused me as a reader to take a step backwards is the ending. I don't think the guy should have the same name. And we as Christians don't want to promote the non-Biblical idea of re-incarnation...right? That's my opinion. Good story line though. I enjoyed it a lot.
12/18/18
You've covered a lot of territory here, and the word limit may have cramped the build-up to your close - otherwise it read well.
12/19/18
Great language skills but the story is not working. Descriptive writing is great, dialogue is natural, but premise of story needs serious tweaking.
12/20/18
This was intriguing! I could feel her discouragement and could picture her surroundings easily. Congratulations on your editor's choice win!
01/11/19
Wow!

How did I miss this gem of a story?

I absolutely LOVED this from start to end, no wonder it garnered a huge win!

I came here after you left a comment on my current entry, and so I clicked on your name because I remember you have such believable and moving stories...and I'm so glad I came to read this well written and powerfully moving story.

Thank you!

God bless~