The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story felt a little chaotic to read, but in retrospect the whole experience you wrote about put you in a chaotic state of mind. Doesn’t the devil love us to be in that place. So glad His spirit rescued you from the chaos and brought you back to rest in the shadow of the Almighty.
12/18/18
Your mix of active and passive voice interrupted the flow for me, though I did resonate with your DIY difficulties.
12/19/18
I tracked with the story without difficulty but found the last two sentences an unsatisfactory conclusion. Love the title. Wondering about a conclusion that reflects the MC acknowledging the 'hole' in some way. You've almost got it, but the ending is missing the point in some way, I think. Sorry I can't be more helpful or specific. It's just that the fish shaped hole shouldn't go to waste.