The Official Writing Challenge
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What a beautiful poem! So full of Truth. Thank you.
What if everyone who posted in Challenge entries also commented on/critiqued at least three others? I'm shocked that so many post, and so few read and post a review for others. It seems only a few people have the courtesy to critique but would like the critiques on their own. I am new here, and originally was excited about this site. If you are one who DOES regularly read and comment on others work, then may the Lord bless you mightily and publish you quickly.
11/24/18
Well-done. I really appreciate the message. Thought-provoking.
This is great. I can totally relate to the MC (perhaps too much in the beginning ;)). I can't always hear rhythm, but this seems to flow right off my tongue. My only comment is something tiny that since I've been editing, stands out and screams at me. In second line you use that (which would work for animals or inanimate objects), but for people it should be who. Like I said a tiny detail. I think someone pointed it out to me once, and ever since then... (teehee). I enjoyed your take on the topic and that the message is powerful. Congratulations on your EC. Happy Dance!