The Official Writing Challenge
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A Masterpiece! So good. Favorite stanza:

For vanity does have its price
You cannot see Me when you're vain
The humble man will seek My face
The proud one treats Me with disdain.

Once again: I love it. Surely this is magazine publishable. I hope you'll submit it, or post publicly online.
What if everyone who posted in Challenge entries also commented on/critiqued at least three others? I'm shocked that so many post, and so few read and post a review for others. It seems only a few people have the courtesy to critique but would like the critiques on their own. I am new here, and originally was excited about this site. If you are one who DOES regularly read and comment on others work, then may the Lord bless you mightily and publish you quickly.
The message of your poem was right on. It was a well written piece that gives a powerful reminder of Bible truths. I imagine writing it as a poem took determination and perseverance.
11/27/18
Very powerful poem, love it. Now to get the vain person to read it.

The only thing I saw was that "chest" and "accursed" does not rhyme.

Great job, God bless!