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In this story are the makings for a book! You've brought a chapter of the Bible to life. Well done. (Awesome title, too.)
04/22/18
Good job personalizing the tenth leper! I like "like a gust of wind" they changed direction. I like how Jesus' eyes spoke a language never heard. I like it all!
At first, I wasn't sure where the story was headed, giving it a little sense of suspense. I didn't expect a turn towards a leper. I liked the transition.

Oops, there were just a couple of mechanical issues. You need the possessive "Aaron's" in the second paragraph, and "it" instead of "is" in the ninth paragraph.

I have always loved this story of the healing of the lepers. I enjoyed reading this historical fiction story.
04/26/18
Nice job!
I thoroughly enjoyed this retelling. I think you did a great job with the POV. It makes me stop and think. You nailed the topic and did so really in two different ways without ever using the topic word. You also showed how negative words like worm can really crush one's self-esteem. Congratulations on ranking 12 overall. Happy Dance!