The Official Writing Challenge
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12/08/17
My favorite section...

"I sat and chatted with her over a cup of coffee. Her eyes sparkled when she told me how they’d met. At a grocery store. “It was while I was holding a bag of Eight O’ Clock coffee when I first heard his baritone voice. He said, ‘coffee smells much better than it tastes.’

My memory quickly retrieved an image of the bag of coffee... aroma is an extra!

Wing His Words
12/15/17
Your article is so full of emotional triggers. I flew from sadness to disgust and over to a sense of "gotcha" and back to sadness, albeit with a slight sense of satisfaction over the lady's being unmasked. Made me really appreciate our HOA Chairman all the more. He's a wonderfully caring and competent man and never been like this lady--fortunately. This story might have made an interesting short story where the characters could have had a bit more meat on their character bones, but you did a really nice job of presenting them in so few words.