The Official Writing Challenge
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11/10/17
Well done,
Blessings~
11/10/17
The man and his son seem to have such a good relationship. It's good to keep some memories alive.
I didn't suspect until the end that they were father and son! Well done. Although, during the story, I kept thinking, why would two friends have a mother with them?
Your descriptions of setting up camp and night time were excellent. For some red ink - the last two pieces of dialogue don't ring quite true. The rest is great, especially the part about the ghost story!
I knew who they were and I am all teared up.
11/16/17
Congratulations on your 4th place finish, Jack.

It's good to read a story about a strong father and son relationship.