The Official Writing Challenge
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09/15/17
Great job with the topic,
well done
Blessings~
This entry shows you shouldn't jump to conclusions without finding out the facts first

Foot in mouth syndrome.

Great job
This is a great story. The ending was a tad predictable, but I still enjoyed it and was eager to keep reading. You did a great job of writing in the present tense. I often struggle with that. You might want to add a bit more of a pull right off the start. For example, I might suggest something like this: As I walk down the hallway,I glance over my shoulder before I grab my fellow teacher's arm and pull her aside. Cupping my hand around her ear, I whisper, "Have you heard about Mr. Franks?"
That's just a quick example to show how to add more showing. I think you did a great job of writing already, but just a few tweaks would make it awesome. I like how you showed even adults, good meaning or overambitious, can make huge mistakes too.
Congratulations on ranking 13 overall. Happy Dance!