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Such a cute kind of story. This appealed to my inner child, I love lightening bugs

I absolutely loved this entry! Warms my heart to read the tenderness between the characters and experience their struggle. You did a terrific job pulling me in. I'd like to see this one in an illustrated book for kids. I know it isn't a true story, but it certainly could be. I've known kids who were raised in a big city who never saw stars, so I reckon they never saw lightning bugs either. That's for a fun read.
What a deLIGHTful story, geared for all ages. You did not "shout" the topic, but approached it with gentle subtlety. I would have added a comma after "Plus," and used the phrase "shone brightly" rather than "shined brightly," but minor points. ( I think the latter requires an object).

Well done!