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05/13/17
Very ingenious story! At first, I could not tell if there were 2 or 3 in the room. Then I realized this was a dream. After a while, I thought I was as crazy as the narrator! I liked your use of wording in..."My mind and my body, like Judas Iscariot and Benedict Arnold, have betrayed me and it makes me mad." I feel like that often too! Thank you for your submission...it really made me think...which is a good sign of unique writing!
05/13/17
Very ingenious story! At first, I could not tell if there were 2 or 3 in the room. Then I realized this was a dream. After a while, I thought I was as crazy as the narrator! I liked your use of wording in..."My mind and my body, like Judas Iscariot and Benedict Arnold, have betrayed me and it makes me mad." I feel like that often too! Thank you for your submission...it really made me think...which is a good sign of unique writing!
05/16/17
Interesting and well done.
Blessings~
05/16/17
This is an interesting piece! I really liked it, but it took me a few minutes to understand that there were two points of view. I didn't get that it was a dream like one of the comments said. I thought it was just the last part that was a dream, or maybe I missed something.
My grandmother had Alzheimer's so I can understand the difficulties....it's a terrible disease. Thank you for sharing this!
05/16/17
This is so true to life. We just lost my mother in-law and now my father in-law is suffering much of the same. The endless struggle to treat them with respect and yet care for their needs.

I only had one place where there was not the bigger break between the two characters that threw me for a minute.

All in all it was well written, touching, and the clever ending every care givers nightmare.