The Official Writing Challenge
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12/09/16
Great line: "And then a morning came when some itchiness of Barbara’s spirit made it strangely difficult to stay in bed." An itch that had to be scratched!

I like a a good cliff hanger. I was a little thrown off by the switch from depressed to happy somewhat abruptly. But you gave a good sense of when she was in both places. Many people will be able to relate.
Congratulations on ranking 15 overall. Happy Dance!