The Official Writing Challenge
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07/21/16
Great descriptions! Loved this.
07/23/16
Great job. I liked how the topic was used to gather courage to play with other children. Pickles sounds pretty special.

Not so sure what you meant by the sentence: There was nothing for it.
07/28/16
Touching story with a happy ending you wish all the "Alfies" of the world could have. And Pickles proves how special dogs are! Most dogs are little ambassadors of love! Also loved the use of the word gobsmacked, I was not familiar with that! Enjoyed the read!
Belinda, Your colorful and vivid descri ptions drew me into the story. I could visualize how lonely Alfie felt.

Congratulation on your EC award.
07/30/16
Congratulations, Belinda, on your 6th place EC win. Alfie and Pickles would be wonderful characters in a children's book.

The parents were a wonderful example of providing support to a more hesitant child.
07/31/16
Congratulations, Belinda, on your EC for this endearing story so well told. I worked out that you are either British or Australian (cricket - no Americans play cricket! I'm an Aussie). I loved the way you drew Alfie's character and his dog, Pickles. It's true that a dog is often a conversation starter, even for children. I think this would make a lovely picture book for children if you can illustrate or get someone else to illustrate it. Many children would relate well to Alfie. Great writing!
Congratulations, Belinda! Terrific title. I like how you slowly built the conflict, then resolved it at just the right pace to be believable.
08/22/16
Your precious story lit up my own face.