The Official Writing Challenge
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05/26/16
I think she just had an awakening, lol. This is a great story. I wonder how it may have sounded written in first person!

Good luck with it!

Claire
I like the story idea. But, I guessed where you were going early on. Increasing suspense would help. I think more telling and less showing would make this a better read, but that may just be me. I enjoyed the predicament the MC finds herself in.
05/30/16
I enjoyed your writing. I guess it was good because it made me angry. Discrimination always has that affect on me, so I think you were successful.
06/02/16
Congratulations, Jan, on winning a 5th place EC award.

Congratulations, Jan! I like the subtle double entendre of your title.
06/05/16
Congratulations, Jan, on your EC. I love the subtle way you have woven your tale so the story tells itself. Very well written.
06/15/16
I almost missed the significance of your title. Nice.
I enjoyed how your MC found out we are them. Well done you clever girl.