The Official Writing Challenge
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Okay, you got me. A great reminder not to jump to conclusions.
I think you did a wonderful job of developing the characters. I could relate to the MC, having gone off the rails a few times myself. Although I could predict the paragraph from the second paragraph, I still enjoyed the story. I think you did a great job of writing on topic too.
I saw the ending coming, but I thoroughly enjoyed the story. It was probably good for Carly that she found ways to treat herself before her birthday.
Well done!

Congratulations, Leola, on your 10th place EC!
Congratulations, Leola, on your 10th place EC award. Carly was an endearing MC.
Your detective had a solid case until truth arrived and surprised her. A nice lesson that assuming the worse usually doesn't end so well.