The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful ending...loved her inner thoughts, great story!

How can you squeeze so much story into a word limit? This is brilliant on so many levels. Great work.
I want to read the unabridged version!!
I was confused for quite a while though. I had to read the trailer scene a few times before I realised the drawer was the register drawer and that, due to some retail experience, large notes sometimes get placed under the drawer.
Also, if they'd paid for the sourdough and cherry pie, the balance should be less than $100 out. Unless of course Ginny made some small errors earlier too.
Ah, as pointed out to me, $100 (goods plus change) did leave the store and was "missing". ;)
One of the best short stories I've read in a long time. I loved the the characters, the misunderstanding in the plot--the ending. Could be published with no changes!
Beautiful in every way!
Enthralling. I love how he called her "Ma'am" and was a changed man. Everyone deserves a second chance. It was also lovely how they ended up getting married. Well written.

Congratulations Jan! I had this entry marked as one of my favorites before the winners were announced. Excellent story and well deserved 1st place award!
No surprise to see that ribbon sitting alongside your name. Great job for a well-deserved win!
Congratulations, Jan, on your well deserved 1st place EC award. I learn so much about the craft of writing just by reading your stories.
And me too. I learn a lot about the craft of writing by reading your work, especially when you became the mysterious Addie Pleasance. Congratulations on placing first with this super story.
Jan, The story was enthralling. It drew me in from start to finish. The ending was brillant. I learn so much reading your stoies and I'm so excited you are writing for the challenges. Masterfully done.

Congratulations on 1st place.
Stunning story of redemption and grace. Love, love, loved it!

You are a magical storyteller.