The Official Writing Challenge
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04/14/16
Moms can be a bit over protective and you showed that conflict here well. The story moved along pretty good and held my interest. First person is tricky to write in and thought you presented it well. You used "I" quite a bit, but that's the biggest challenge in writing in this tense. Overall a nice story with a satisfying ending and I would want to read more of your work. Good job.
04/16/16
This was a really nice story. I kind of saw where it was going early on, but that doesn't really matter--it just means it didn't disappoint me. :)

It had such a ring of authenticity that I would not be surprised to find out it's a true story.

Very nice work! Thanks for sharing it with us.
04/16/16
Great authentic tone this well written piece.

Nicely done.

Blessings!
04/21/16
This rings true. Well done.
04/21/16
Congrats!
Blessings~
04/21/16
Congratulations, LeslieJean, on your well deserved 3rd place EC award.

It's a pity that so many teens are walking away from the church. I'm glad you showed that church can be fun.
04/21/16
Congratulations on your EC place. Somehow I missed this one earlier but, reading it just now, I really enjoyed it. Well written!
05/10/16
Oh what a terrific ending! I absolutely adore how you wrapped this up.