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04/14/16
An enjoyable read. It carried along at a good pace and kept my attention. The conversation was sharp and stayed on focus. Maybe a little work with characterization imho, wish I knew more about the animal balloon, kool aid and advice giver. But you described the birthday boy right on. Very good and entertaining. Nice job!
04/14/16
An enjoyable read with a clever ending. I don't know if kids drink much Kool-Aid these days; I think they drink more soda pop or sports drink.
04/14/16
I enjoyed this and Brandon's personality rang true, including wanting to see the effect of the sugarless Kool-Aid on his friends. A little 'red ink' - I doubt that 7th graders would be doing those types of things at a party. Perhaps you could lower Brandon's age a bit. But, a good story.
04/15/16
I really enjoyed your story. Such a great message that we are all different and it's okay to be quiet and enjoy your own company. I loved the description of what the kids were doing at the party. Well written indeed.
04/16/16
Love the title! Great job with the topic, well done.

Blessings~
04/21/16
Congrats Joe!
Well done,
Blessings~
04/21/16
Congratulations, Joe, on your 1st place EC award. Your characters were well developed.
Oh this is pure delight. I love the dialog and the characters. The last line was the best and gave me a great chuckle to start my day. Congratulations! Happy Dance!
04/21/16
Congratulations Joe! A well earned first place win!
04/21/16
Joe,

Well done! This was a very enjoyable story and I love the dialogue. Your delivery was very smooth and it was interesting to the end.

Great job!
04/22/16
Joe, Congratulations on your 1st place win in the EC. The last line of the piece was my favorite.
05/10/16
Entertaining look at what I assume you designed to be a retro look at what a 12 year old's party might have been like 25 or so years ago.
Those darn kids keep getting older younger.
My soon to be 8 year old grand daughter is almost over all the kind of fun which I still might embarrassingly enjoy on a good day. Bounce house oh yeah!
Good story with a fabulous ending. I liked Brandon's innocent revenge.
Congratulations on your 1st place win.
08/10/16
Joe, I loved this story. It had good humor and kept me wondering what would happen next at the party. It also had a touch of sadness for the little boy and then ended with humor. I thought the kool-aid without sugar was a clever way to end it. Congratulations on winning First Place!