The Official Writing Challenge
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02/27/16
You had me wondering how the story would end and kept me guessing. Nice job!
02/28/16
I enjoyed how you built the suspense right to the end.
Well done.
Haha, nice ending to a rather intense story.

I would like to have seen him make a comment about needing to talk to his son about stealing...God forgives us for our sins, but there are still lessons to learn and things we need to make right with the people we hurt.

But the ending was still a relief! Good job.
03/01/16
This story was action packed and suspenseful. You had me guessing the whole time.

I think the MC should have shared his past with his wife.
I know God had forgiven him, but I think it is important to keep open communication between husband and wife. Especially if he felt it might impact his family at some point.
Intense and thrilling! You had me enthralled throughout. You covered so much in such little space - I can't wait to read more of your writing . . .
03/03/16
Congratulations, Vince, on your 3rd place EC award. Suspenseful and masterfully told.
Yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
03/03/16
Congratulations on your placing. Well done.
03/03/16
Very clever! My heart is still racing. Makes me think "Be sure your sins will find you out". Well done, and congratulations!!
You really captured the dynamic of guilt and anxiety about the past and how it affects us. Masterfully done. Excellent resolution and finish. Praise God for a finished past. The title was clever. Reminds me of that TV series 'Dead letter office'. There were some good stories in that.
03/04/16
Fantastic story! You had me reeled in,, too, wondering what was going to happen to him. A very clever twist at the end and a very well deserved win!
You totally had me going with this one, Vince. Congratulations!
03/16/16
Misunderstandings abound Aye?

Gave me pause as to what would go through my mind under those circumstances.

I'm sure that was just an added bonus to your tale...