The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow! This brought tears to my eyes. Very poignant story. Good writing, too. God bless.
I love everything about this engaging story from the first paragraph to the brilliant ending. Pops is a very believable character and you depicted him well through the observations of the grandson. I thought Pop's advice, "Win if you can, lose if you must, but always cheat," repeated back to him on his deathbed was a great way to end. The story flows beautifully all the way through. Methinks this entry is destined for a top spot!
You did a great job fitting so much story into the Challenge word count. Without that limitation, I could see this piece expanding. Since you linked to Brick-throwing, I will say that there were a couple of places at the end where I wondered if James' grammar lined up with that of his position as a trial lawyer. I hesitate to say that, though, because your writing is so good :)
This was an excellent characterization piece. Carrying through the idea of cheating to the end was a nice touch.
Oh my Zach--

Big ole crocodile tears welling up from your superbly thought out and brilliantly executed story.

One of my favorites of all time!
I really enjoyed this story.The characters were believable and I liked the way you brought in Pop's saying at the end,so skilfully:
Well, win if you can, lose if you must... But always cheat."Great writing!
Wow what a powerful story. I loved your characters. So often I've heard Christians complain that it's not fair that some people wait until the end, but thankfully for us, Jesus promises mercy not fairness. Great story and powerful message.
My favorite of all time. You hit every vibrating sympathetic nerve in me. I love your heart, Mr. Z . . .
Congratulations on ranking 12th overall. Happy Dance!