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This was full of suspense and kept my attention throughout. Great dialogue between both characters.
02/14/16
This is a winner for sure.
An absorbing read that draws us in on so many levels; and this para -
"It was there, across from my swastika sporting friend, I began to do something war doesn't permit. Hope." - captures the whole picture so beautifully.
This is an exceptionally moving piece - enthralling. You should flesh this out into a book, methinks. What was truly delicious about this was the totally unexpected friendship that developed so quickly. Chocolate is a great equalizer, but the hearts of your characters melted in my hands while reading this. Thank you for a truly heart-provoking message . . .
02/16/16
My breath hung in the air like the ghosts of my neighbors hung in my mind.

Beautifully done. It reads like non-fiction but doesn't state that it is. Either way, every word captured me.

A pleasure to read.
02/16/16
Powerful story. Your ability to transport me back in time is quite a skill. I hope to learn to write this way.

There is such richness in the story you shared. Amazing job.
This remarkable story is for me a winner--surely publishable as is.
02/17/16
This story was so inspirational. The dialogue and setting were masterfully done.

The next to last sentence didn't make sense to me: holding the hand of wife.
02/17/16
This story was so inspirational. The dialogue and setting were masterfully done.

The next to last sentence didn't make sense to me: holding the hand of wife.
02/18/16
Your prose flows like poetry in this piece, and contrasted against the starkness of the setting, is almost breathtaking. Beautiful.
02/18/16
Beautiful!

Blessings~
02/18/16
Congratulations! A well-deserved win!
02/18/16
Me, again. Congratualtions! Well deserved!
I loved this rich, historical story! Congratulations on your well-deserved EC award.
02/18/16
Congrats!
Blessings~
Zach, Congratulations on your second place in Masters. Your imagery is something to behold. This was a breathtaking story that gives a historical journey back in time. Well deserved.
Congratulations on 2nd place--my favorite this week!
02/18/16
Congratulations, Zach, on your 2nd place EC award. This was one of my favorite stories this week.
02/19/16
This is an amazing story of hope, and a well deserved second place overall. Congrats!
Magnificent, my friend . . .
02/21/16
Congratulations on your 2nd place. This is beautifully and senstively written and held my interest throughout, without any jarring moments at all. Great writing!
02/22/16
Very, very moving.
02/24/16
You have a special gift of capturing the mood, the essence of a story as if you had lived it.

Well done.