The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow---this is an excellent story, I really was drawn into it. It was as if I was reading a journey, or a true life story from a book.

Well done.

God bless~
This ended way too soon! I do hope you'll be making this short story into a book. You had me hooked with every line. Excellent storytelling.
Cliffhanger! This is a story that catches and holds the readers from start to cliffhanger finish. I really enjoyed it.
This well written story was intriguing from beginning to end, but I wanted to know more.

I agree that this easily could be made into a book.
Awww-no fair! I want to know more. Of course, that means this is a great story. You had me from beginning and past the end....I'm still wondering.

Well done!

This was excellent from beginning to end. I was pleasantly surprised by the father's realization that his daughter needed freedom. Loved it!