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This is a beautiful, touching story. I could see the lion as I read. Loved your take on the Narnia title, too!
A beautifully touching entry filled with majesty and warmth. If it could only be made into a book.
10/30/15
I was enraptured by the scene of the lion, the lamb and the boy. A reminder to always be watchful.
What a delightful story. This would be perfect for a picture book while simultaneously be a perfect fit for an adult magazine. That's not an easy task to do, but you made it look that way.

My red ink is tiny. Near the end, you used you're instead of your people (I'm sure you spotted it already.) and used that instead of who in I know a shepherd who (not that) will lead them.

This story is full of great mental pictures. You really made me use my senses as I could almost hear the noises, feel the hay, and smell the air. I enjoyed it immensely.
Congratulations on ranking 14th overall! Happy Dance!