The Official Writing Challenge
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02/27/15
Clever and amusing mix of internal and external dialogue, though italics for those internal verbals might make it easier for us readers to stay with you. Oh, sorry we had "Sloth" a couple of weeks back, and it's found a home in what is disguised as my brain.
I also like the twist you have slipped in at the end. Well done.
03/02/15
I like the introspection at the end.
03/02/15
Great job with this!

God bless~
03/06/15
Your descriptions of these two were quite entertaining and smile-worthy. :) I loved the way your story ended (and your title perfect.) Great writing skills displayed here.