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11/06/14
Touching poignant and powerful read. Wow...great job.

So glad he was finally rescued.

God bless~
11/06/14
This is so very touching. How sad that Lauren was given such poor advice from a supposed friend. And yet what a beautiful friendship she developed with Paul. Beautifully told, with a touch of hope given to the reader at the end. Thank you for that. Well done.
11/08/14
Very powerfully written and sadly credible profile of the pain caused by deceit.
11/09/14
Interesting story and well written. Your MC's "voice" is believable and we feel her inner turmoil. Good job on this one!
Oh wow! I can't think of any other word but wow! Your message is so profound. I do believe this is my all-time favorite. You've made a difference with your words, just as I have when you prompted me to pray for the Pauls in the world. Congratulations on ranking 19 overall! Happy Dance! (I seldom admit I disagree with the judges, but this is one of the best stories I've ever read.)
I never read titles. My only other thought than Wow is don't let the title give away the ending, but still I say wow!
11/15/14
Wow Leola! My heart hurt for Paul and the MC. You brought them to life. So many little ones are hurting in this world. The ending gave me relief to see a tragic story come around to hope.