The Official Writing Challenge
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10/30/14
Well, I'm sure glad shivaree's don't really happen anymore!

You really caught the language well for the era this was set in, I think.

I like how you revealed the story in flashback.

I was a little confused at the beginning.... was Ellen dreaming about a cow under her bed? about feeding it hay? that maybe could be a little bit clearer?

Otherwise, I really enjoyed it and felt concern for all in involved.
10/31/14
Excellent writing this informative and compelling piece. It had moments of levity, along with intrigue, and a fun close.


Well done.

Shivaree: A clamorous salutation made to a newlywed couple.

just a note to those who might not know what it is, such as "moi." LOL

10/31/14
Excellent writing this informative and compelling piece. It had moments of levity, along with intrigue, and a fun close.


Well done.

God Bless~



Shivaree: A clamorous salutation made to a newlywed couple.

Just a note to those who might not know what it is, such as "moi." LOL
10/31/14
I felt drawn in immediately. I especially liked this: "He struggled with the window. The farmhouse, built in 1889, resisted with the strength of its fifty years, then screechingly let go." That one sentence said so much.

Nicely paced and I learned something new. I'd never heard of this ritual. I don't see a strong showing of the topic, but still enjoyed it a lot.
I loved this. You did a nice job of pulling out the suspense and your timing was great. I wish the title hadn't given away the ending. I'd have never guessed a shivaree. You did a nice job of writing on genre and I delighted in your subtle humor. Congratulations on ranking 17 overall! Happy Dance!