The Official Writing Challenge
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10/31/14
You have a special talent in story telling in this genre. I could almost hear the narrative voice speaking to me in person.

Well done...and great entry.
I think this will score well.

God bless~
11/01/14
Great story! My one suggestion would be to consider only using the following sentence in the one paragraph - 'I continued writing in my journal, jotting down the observation, as is my habit to do on my daily ride.' - I find that all the aside information that follows that sentence distracts me from the urgency of the plot you were deftly developing. I would skip the rest of the paragraph and go right into her noticing the man going into the green door. (This is just an opinion of mine, but I feel it would help rivet the suspense in this story.)
This is a really good article, no a great article!; a first rate story that makes for a fun read indeed.

Keep up the great work, and thank you for bringing to the table, a true masterpiece!
11/06/14
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved 2ND PLACE E.C. for this suspenseful, superbly-crafted story! Your descriptions and word choices were a delight to read! WAY TO WRITE!! :)
11/06/14
Congrats!
Great story Tracy, I loved it.

God bless~
11/08/14
Congratulations, Tracy, for your well deserved second place EC. You've told this story really well. Great writing!