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08/29/14
Beautifully written and expressed. Thank you.

God bless~
08/29/14
I was wrapped up in this story from the first sentence. I only wish you'd let us dangle for a bit before clueing us in that this John the Baptist. The moment you mentioned Herod's name, it became obvious.

But that's just a personal preference. The way you did it is just fine.

My only real red ink would be that you rather suddenly change perspective on us in one spot when Andrew is speaking and deliver some of his inner monologue, and then switch back to John. That was a little confusing to me and broke my stride in reading the story.

But other than that, I found this an excellent read with great characters and dialogue. You really breathed life into a fictional glimpse of John's time in Herod's jail.

Great job!
09/02/14
You did a good job of crafting the story using a well-known incident in history. And the ending was very satisfying. You made a great case for the peace and joy that goes beyond all earthly circumstances, found only in Christ. Keep up the great work!
Congratulations on ranking 11th overall!