The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a creative idea. I really enjoyed the out-of-the-box story. I loved your MC and the way the family solved the dilemma. I noticed some minor things like you should write out numbers to at least ten, some say a hundred. In the middle you did a nice job of using dialog, but in the parts slipped into more telling. Dialog is a great way to pull the reader in . I totally became invested in the story and liked the hope you showed at the end. You nailed the topic and really demonstrated the way God helps even in seemingly hopeless situations. Nice job.
07/23/14
Spectacular story with an interesting take on the topic.

God bless~