The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a really well done allegory--right on topic.
Beautifully written. This entry held great significance while being completely on topic.

Nicely done. Thank you.

God bless~
A well written take on an important and memorable Bible story. Nice job on the topic!
This is a bit of genius. Your message comes through loud and clear. Even though this is a serious topic you added a bit of humor which I think helps people see similar traits in themselves. Spotting those faults is so important. I'm sure others will be touched by your words as well.
I enjoyed your well-written story and its message. Thank you.
I thought this was Great! I saw no red ink and if Shann didnt you know it is perfect! Love it!
I love your story; it has a little of everything in it. I love also your descriptive writing... one sentence in particular brought a smile to my face... "The soothing sounds of the bird on the wing, and the rustling of squirrels at play gave way to the frantic sounds of splashing, thrashing, and sputtering." A delight to read.