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This story had me in tears. Why does it so often take a 'mirror' for some women to realize the horror their enabling causes? Yet they think they're being noble and forgiving. They really need to make a stand against the abusive actions, hoping it will affect a genuine change.
A horrible story I would never want to read . . . but written so expertly, with an absolutely right on message, I had no choice. It actually made me stop and examine my own past, and made me wonder if there were steps I should have taken, though my issue was emotional rather than physical.
This is so disturbing to read yet for many people it's reality. I'm pleased you ended with the right action for mom and Riley to take.
This was powerfully executed, the words you chose brought it to life. The scenario was repulsive to my entire being...and so sad to realize that this is a vast reality for so many out there.

I was thrilled with the correct course of action the mom finally took. I pray this wasn't anything more than a "story" about the horrific issue of abuse.

Thank you for sharing this entry. It was so well crafted it truly made me reel. God bless you~
This was so well written. Perfect flow from beginning to end. Excellent!
Wow, this is a great story. It is a similar one to the one I wrote this week but by adding the little girl yours is head and shoulders above mine. You did a fantastic job of drawing me into this sad, but oh how often true, story.

The only red ink I noticed is near the end, you didn't start a new paragraph when the speaker changed.

This is definitely a difficult topic to read and write but I think it's vital that people know this goes on, even in Christian families. You went a step further and showed how it can write on the very soul of our children and change them forever. The ending is perfect and I hope it inspires anyone living in this kind of environment to get help NOW.
Congratulations for ranking 19th overall!