The Official Writing Challenge
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I love this story. It is well written with vivid word pictures. It really tugs at the heart.
Enjoyed your really well written and interesting story. Thanks!
Your story is really excellent--draws the reader into the scene right away by showing, not telling. I so wanted the little girl to respond to the story. Definitely on target for the topic.
Oh, I like this. It's amazing how kids listen even when we don't think they do, isn't it? I loved the ending.
The conclusion gave me goosebumps! I though the girl could have autism, which would explain her reaction to the noise around her. Even if not- great story!
This one touched me. Reminded me of VBS and Good News Club, where we have an emphasis on missionary work. I could see some of my kids in your little girl. Thanks for writing. Blessings.
This is such a sweet story. I enjoyed it all. I wondered what made the little girl's heart hurt so that she tried to tune out the world. There are so many little ones who hurt like that. Nice storytelling.
You have included some great verbal pictures and a real sense of hope and continuity. Thoroughly true to life.
I loved your descriptions of the girl and her responses to the environment and then the story. Good work.
Congratulations for placing 8th in your level and 12th overall!