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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Conversation (face to face) (10/07/10)
Good morning, Harry.
Maybe if I speak loudly enough, he’ll pay attention to me. I dread asking him for money, but our living room curtains are falling apart.

Morning, Gladys
What does SHE want this morning? It had better not be money…

Can I get you some breakfast, Harry?
Maybe if I make him a nice breakfast it will be easier to tell him about the curtains. They were so bright and beautiful when we bought them, but now they’re sagging open and look worn out.

No, thanks. I have a breakfast meeting at work.
Like I’m gonna eat that slop she calls cooking. I’ll stop somewhere on the way. I surely don’t want to spend any more time here; she’ll just ask for money for something.

That sounds interesting. What would you like for dinner tonight?
Well, he doesn’t want breakfast, but I’ll have to get his attention somehow. I’ve repaired those curtains so often, but time has worn down the fabric and they’ve collected so much dust I can’t see through them.

I don’t care. Surprise me.
Everything you make tastes like Styrofoam Helper anyway. Why does she keep looking at the curtains?

Don’t forget; Joey has a softball game tonight.
He never pays attention to me anymore. I don’t know what to do. Maybe if I talk about the kids…

I’ll see if I can make it.
That kid is so pathetic. How can a guy like me have a son like that?

Honey. Please look at me.
This is awful. God, please help us. Please work in our hearts and heal our marriage. We can’t go on this way.

OK. I’m looking. What do you want?
What does she want – and what’s it gonna cost me this time?

Harry, I don’t want us to be this way. Do you remember how it was when we were first married? We’ve both changed so much. Let’s get some help before it’s too late.
Please, God. Please help us. We’re kind of like those curtains; we used to be beautiful and new. Now, we’re worn and torn apart and beyond our own efforts to repair.

Yeah, OK Gladys. Whatever you say. I’ve got to go to work.
I guess she’s right about us being different. I know God can do anything, so maybe He can fix this. I’ll deal with it after work.

Have a good day, honey.
God bless you, Harry. I’ll be praying today. Just like the curtains, our marriage needs to be made new.

Yeah, thanks. You, too. Don’t worry; we’ll work it out.
Thanks. You, too. Don’t worry; with God’s help, we’ll work it out.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/24/10
I like this conversation. At some point they both appear to be on the same page but it's obvious their marriage is barely holding on. I liked reading their real thoughts underneath the words.
Sarah Heywood
10/26/10
This is interesting. But I was pleased to see Harry's willingness to admit that their marriage needs some help and intervention. I also like your line about how their marriage is like the curtains - and really, as the reader gets into the piece, he can quickly see that while the curtains are the surface issue, things go much deeper.

I enjoyed this - good writing!