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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: The Inner Person (09/09/10)
I feel so tiny
Insignificant
Lost in a maze
Of fleshly desire
Buried
D
E
E
P
Down
In the dark part
Of a bleeding
Pleading
Soul
Injured
Accompanied only by
E
C
H
O
E
S
Of prayers
Of pleas
To be set
FREE

From me

From
Me

An
Unshackled
Version
Of my fleshly
Sin lovin’
Self

E
C
H
O
E
S

Of pleas
Painful
Prayers

Pockets
Of
Pleases

Of
Bargaining
Begging

Everything
But
Believing

Everything
But
Believing

A voice arose
Like the sun
A sunrise
A pinkish
Red
Dawn
Brushed lightly
With
Shades of
White
Wispy virgin
Clouds
Floating ahead
Of a blue sky
A new day

“Arise”
The voice
Whispered
“Arise”
The voice
Whispered

The scent of light
Filled
My lungs
That once ached
From screams
Of slavery

From screams
Of slavery

“Arise”
I heard
And took a deep
Breath

“Arise”
I heard
And filled my lungs
With new life

“Arise”
I heard

So
I Arose
And
Lived
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Date
Francy Judge 
09/16/10
This is beautiful--excellent word pictures and the creative format emphasized the feelings. I'm glad it ended with hope.
Charla Diehl
09/16/10
Creative formatting gave strength to this lovely poem. Its highs and lows were felt while a sense of peace draped over the concluding stanza. Liked this a lot.
Loren T. Lowery
09/17/10
There seemed to be a natural rhythm to the formatting of this poem that the reader is lulled into a certain peacefulness. Yet the journey of the words are emotional and turbulent - searching, falling. But still an assurednes that the author knows what they are doing - where they are headed and the outcome will be okay - and it was indeed, exceedingly so.
Pat Guy
09/18/10
Oh my! I just SO loved and enjoyed each word! Awesome prose -- just awesome. It has everything. Great work!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/18/10
Wow this is so creative it really touched my heart.
Barbara Lynn Culler 
09/20/10
So very creative and with an awesome message.
Allison Egley 
09/21/10
Oh, I really, really like this. I love the "echos" especially!
DK Landers
09/21/10
The imagery in your poem is awesome. I like reading it so much. It captures that cry in the dark of a lost person seeking God's deliverance. You are truly a creative poet.
Cheryl Harrison 
09/21/10
Very creative. Beautiful.
Rachel Phelps
09/22/10
Beautiful.
Angela M. Baker-Bridge
09/22/10
I love the out-of-the-box approach and format which really enriched the experience. Well done.
Christina Banks
09/22/10
I love the way that your format fit with your piece. Wonderful!
Catrina Bradley 
09/22/10
Fabulous! The creative format is very effective in delivering the emotions of your message. I felt your words echoing in my own inner person. Love it.
PamFord Davis 
09/23/10
WOW!
Christina Banks
09/23/10
Congratulations on you EC!
Loren T. Lowery
09/23/10
I sort of suspected this would place high. It is certainly deserving. Sir William, the Poet. Kind of has a nice ring to it. Bravo and congratulations, Bill.
Sara Harricharan
09/23/10
Ah, this is wonderful. I love the use of "Echoes" It lends a different dimension to this.

Congrats! ^_^