The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked your little girl Lilli. Such great descriptions and then I had a sudden jar to the jail house. That was unexpected.
Wow! Great message. I too, was surprised by the swift change in 'scenery' but that does not mean it was a determent in anyway to your story line.
Very good descriptions... I could hear the "pop" when Lillie pulled her fingers out of her mouth. :)
A positive ending in the face of life's tougher moments.