The Official Writing Challenge
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I could feel the rush and race against the clock and the things you've pointed out, needing to be done, convicted me to get started on my own chores yet waiting : )
Your descriptions were so well done that I was swept up into your country winter scene, and the images stayed in my mind. The rhythm throughout was exactly that of the ticking clock. I like how you began with the clock sound and ended with it in reverse. Great job.
Delightful! I love the rhythm and the rhyme in this poem. It is so evocative of a winter scene and cozy house.
I love poetry and this is well done! Can I come to your little country home in the briskness of winter and thaw my frozen toes by the fire.? great descriptions and flow, meter and rhythm was right on.
I agree that the rhythm of the clock is present in this poem from start to finish. Certainly depicts life on a farm as one prepares for the season. Thumbs up to you.
Wonderful a - wonderful a - wonderful poem. I just loved this and the whole thought process. Great Job and I think this should is a winner a - winner a - winner!
Thanks for the rhythic comment, Deborah!
This is really neat—so comforting.
My you covered a lot of ground in this most delighful piece. It is delicious!
Wonderful, Vonnie! I found so many "tricks" in the onomatopoeia and the alliteration, and the way the rhythm drives the mood. Top notch!
I thought the format lent itself more to a rhyming poem so I was thrown off by the lack of rhyme. I would have enjoyed it more as a rhyming poem.
ever-day-life in descriptive rhythmic expression. Thank you for showing us how it's done.
I liked the "Turkey's grain-fed fat" Love the warmness and slower pace of winter described here, especially how it relates to the title. This is so cleverly written!
It flowed so well that I thought it did rhyme...I had to go back and read a second time to realize it didn't!
So cleverly done. I felt the rhythm of the clock all the way through. Well written!