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This is so well written and has such a easy flow about it. I read it quickly, but thought it a long time.
A lot of wisdom here wrapped up in a very light-weight shell. I thought the explanations were perfectly suited to a child, and you avoided both making it too sentimental and too heavy.
This was a light hearted read with a message suited to children. I could see this as a Sunday School story. Good job.
A lot of sorrow here... but much hope, as well. You did a very good job of balancing the two! Well done.
You took a very deep subject and explained it simply and well. I loved the wisdom of Grandpa and the resiliency of the child.
Great story to explain life after death. Very sweet interaction between Grandfather and Grandchild. I could picture the whole scene in my mind. Well done.
First of all, I want to start with the ending. I like how you ended this on a light-hearted note after tackling a difficult subject for children. Also, the light-heartedness throughout the story helped balance the sorrow...such as the grandpa joining the girl on the ground. Well-written story!
Sweet. The relationship of grandpa to child is so rich. Each carrying burdens, both moving forward. Really enjoyed the voice of the piece.
Sherry, On at least 6 of the comments I tried to make today on various entries, the link would take me to the next one down from "leave a comment" which was about sending a private message. In each case, I tried and tried but couldn't get to leave a comment.
This was so sweet...I want to roll in the grass with them! Awesome story...
This is such a sweet, lovely piece, Shirley--absolutely my favorite kind of story!
Shirley, I'm going to feature this delightful story on the Front Page Showcase for the week of July 26. Look for it on the FaithWriters Home Page--and congratulations!
I already left a message when you first wrote this powerful story. Wanted to add a note of congratulations and recognition on this story. It is well-deserved.
This is wonderful! Well-written and thought-provoking. Congratulations!!