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04/09/09
Great way to present the tragedy of Bipolar Disorder. Well done.
Present tense works well for this piece, drawing the reader into the uncertainty the young girls feel. Well written.
04/10/09
Well written example of the need for balance in our lives.
I think you did an excellent job.

I really felt this.
well written story. I felt sad for all the characters but sensed the hope in the end for all as well too.
04/15/09
Such a sad thing to have to endure. This was well-written, showing the ups and downs of this disorder.
04/16/09
Good description of Bipolar--and the effects of medication "For a while, there will be no bad days or good days, there will only be days. "

I like the pattern to this story--the contrasts and mirror images between the first 2 sections and the resolution that ties it all up.
Bipolar disorders are so complicated. I think you did a good job illustrating the ups and down of this disorder. I really like your last line.
04/16/09
so sad for kids when their parent can't be a parent

well written
04/16/09
Your voice is spot on, and this is a powerful approach to the topic. Well done.