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I love the parallels between the girl and the horse. I hope this is part of a longer story. I'd certainly read more. Very nicely done.
I liked the inner thoughts you revealed throughout the story. I felt the story was more about the girl's and the horse's untamable spirits, so I think a different title would suit this better...just my opinion.
I love the strength of the MC and I agree that this feels like it needs a bigger story to do it justice!
I agree, this was a good story, and too short. I want to read the next chapter, where she successfully rides the horse around the corral!
Nicely done! Strong character! Looking forward (hopefully?) to reading the rest of the story!
This was wonderful! I liked the way you portrayed her frustration with 'white' ways. Good job!